Place and Time Workshop

Calli Grimes

Short Story

a) I loved this story. It was totally engaging and great to read. The only thing I would change is connecting the experience to why it changed your life. I know you're not done, so you'll do that. I love your humor and recollection of your experiences. Your descritptions were great, like the white and pink tye-dye bit. It was great.

b) Again, establish your connections. What was the importance of your scary experience.

Andres Aguilar

Personal Essay

a) It was great hearing about the journey that got you in America. Maybe add a little bit of how you were feeling about moving. There's a lot of "jumpiness". What is the connection between all the stories, and what exactly is your place? I'm guessing it's your room in Germany. But it isn't clear.

b) Connections.